Friday, April 18, 2008
Desert Of My Heart
In the desert of my heart
past loves are left to wither
Their bones scattered
bleached and dry
half covered in sand
that burns without flames
No survivors
©2008 Fenny
Prompted by Writers Island
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Yeow! Ouch! Done with them, I guess... I've read it over three times now and get the same start as the first time. It's like touching a hot stove. Well done.
Posted by: Richard Wells | Friday, April 18, 2008
Ooh! The last line is the best.
Posted by: Noah | Saturday, April 19, 2008
Wow say good bye to the oldies
Posted by: jadey | Saturday, April 19, 2008
An undulating dune
Of sand very fine.
The tip blows away
Changing its outline.
Revealing in its shift
A hitherto unseen
And priceless gift
An oasis so green.
A verdant solace
For eyes now parched
A saving grace
For memories that torched.
Posted by: shubd | Saturday, April 19, 2008
I trust you didn't eat them first! Great piece
Posted by: keith hillman | Saturday, April 19, 2008
most of mine have joined them,, those dry withered bones... but one calls to me from the grave and haunts me every day......
Posted by: paisley | Sunday, April 20, 2008
This is very good. The images are crystal clear. I'm thinking of The English Patient or the Old West. My favourite line is: "that burns without flames". There's that double meaning with the scorching sand and the burnt out flame of love. You have such a gift, Fenny.
Kat
Posted by: Poetikat | Sunday, April 20, 2008
well there was one..thats your heart..
Posted by: rambler | Sunday, April 20, 2008
You can FEEL this poem; the dryness, death and waste of the past loves.
Posted by: Scott | Monday, April 21, 2008
I love this piece. I have been in that place so many times. Great writing!
Posted by: Jane Doe | Monday, April 21, 2008
I love this! Hits hard, to the point -- takes no survivors. Well written... ;)
Posted by: rob kistner | Monday, April 21, 2008
You are the featured poet of the day at PWB. Thanks for being on our blogroll.
Posted by: Sara | Wednesday, April 30, 2008
loving your blog of lilting words and phrases..
Posted by: sandy | Friday, May 02, 2008
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